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Theme: [ESSAY] Do you believe in birthstones? What does your birthstone mean?
I believe in birthstones and I know what is my birthstone.
My birthstone is pearl.
I like pearl because pearl is not so preety but not so ugly.
And only pearl born(?) in natural.
Pearl means health and long live.
I want to live long so I like my birthstone, pearl~!
: ) ^-^

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Hello there, Clair!

Here's your first homework! Enjoy your date with your mom, and stay safe!

Cheers,
Jean~~


              Theme: [ESSAY] Do you believe in birthstones? What does your birthstone mean?


I believe in birthstones and I know what is my birthstone.
>> I believe in birthstones and I know what my birthstone is. 

My birthstone is pearl.
>> correct

I like pearl because pearl is not so preety but not so ugly.
>> I like pearls because they are not so pretty but not so ugly as well. 

And only pearl born(?) in natural.
>> And a pearl is the only birthstone that is naturally created. 

Pearl means health and long live.
>> Pearls mean health and long life. 

I want to live long so I like my birthstone, pearl~!
>> correct
>> or: I want to have a long life so I like my birthstone. 

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