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Which one would you rather use as your main source of information, the internet or books? Explain yo

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Absolutely Internet, we are smart phone generation. so we can get information easily with phone. we don't need to read book to get information. but you should be careful when you get information with smart phone. because they who upload and share information in internet are almost not professional. so the information doesn't guarantee what they correct. so whenever you get information, always you should filter part of them.

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Hi Tobby! Yes. the internet is a very convenient tool to use to get information. It makes our lives more convenient. Although, not all information on the internet is reliable that's why we should be careful in picking our sources. ^^

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Absolutely Internet, we are smart phone generation. 
>> I would absolutely pick the internet. We are a smart phone generation. 

so we can get information easily with phone. 
>>We can get information easily with phones. 

we don't need to read book to get information. 
>>We don't need to read book to get information. 

but you should be careful when you get information with smart phone. 
>> Although, we should be careful when getting information using the internet because most the people who post there are not reliable sources. 

because they who upload and share information in internet are almost not professional. 
>> CONNECT WITH THE SENTENCE ABOVE. 

so the information doesn't guarantee what they correct. 
>> That's we can't guarantee if the information is correct. 

so whenever you get information, always you should filter part of them.
>>so whenever you get information, you  should always filter them.

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