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I think that investment is best way to use extra money. If we invest extra money, we should spread investment. In Korea, investing the real estate gives the biggist return.
But it costs a lot of money. So I invest Korean stock, American stock, gold and dollar.

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Thank you for your time again, Dr. Alice, well said, and I hope your investments will grow big in time =) See you in class. =)
~~ T. Ali =)

I think that investment is best way to use extra money.
>> Correct
If we invest extra money, we should spread investment.
>>  
If we invest extra money, we should spread our  investment. 
In Korea, investing the real estate gives the biggist return.
>> 
In Korea, investing in real estate gives the biggest return.
But it costs a lot of money.
>> Correct
So I invest Korean stock, American stock, gold and dollar.
>> 
So I invest in Korean stock, American stock, gold and dollars.
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