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Do you agree that cryptocurrency should be taxed? Why or why not?

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I agree that cryptocurrency should be taxed.
First, if cryptocurrency should be taxed, we an prevent speculation.
Since cryptocurrency haven¡¯t been taxed until now, many rich people did speculation and the value of cryptocurrency has fluctuated.
Therefore, if cryptocurrency should be taxed, we can prevent this kind of problems.
Second, if cryptocurrency should be taxed, it can be valued as a real currency.
It is recognized only as a means of payment, but it will expand its scope someday.
In case cryptocurrency is recognized as a real currency, cryptocurrency should be taxed.

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Do you agree that cryptocurrency should be taxed? Why or why not?

I agree that cryptocurrency should be taxed.
>>> CORRECT

First, if cryptocurrency should be taxed, we an prevent speculation.
>>> First, if cryptocurrency will be taxed then we can prevent speculations.

Since cryptocurrency haven¡¯t been taxed until now, many rich people did speculation and the value of cryptocurrency has fluctuated.
>>> Since cryptocurrency hasn¡¯t been taxed up until now, many rich people were speculated and the value of the cryptocurrency has fluctuated.

Therefore, if cryptocurrency should be taxed, we can prevent this kind of problems.
>>> Therefore, if cryptocurrency will be taxed then we can prevent these kinds of problems from happening.

Second, if cryptocurrency should be taxed, it can be valued as a real currency.
>>> Second, if cryptocurrency will be taxed then it can be valued as a real currency.

It is recognized only as a means of payment, but it will expand its scope someday.
>>> CORRECT

In case cryptocurrency is recognized as a real currency, cryptocurrency should be taxed.
>>> CORRECT
OR: In case cryptocurrency is already recognized as a real currency, then it should be taxed.
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