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If a person steals a loaf of bread because he needs to feed his starving family, should he be punish

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I think he have to be punished.
There is law because of this society.
If we break laws, this society will be very confused.
There is lots of people who are very poor because of unfair reasons.
But, everyone shoudn't break laws.
So I think he have to be punished.

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Hi John! This is a very hard situation to be in indeed. There are usually times in our lives that emotions take over us and not realize that we are doing bad things already. Remember that no matter how hard our situation is, we should always be on the right path. Doing bad things won't make things any better. Thanks for sharing your opinion :) 

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I think he have to be punished.
>> I think he has to be punished. 

There is law because of this society.
>> There are laws in this society. 

If we break laws, this society will be very confused.
>> If we don't follow the laws, there would be a no alignment. 

There is lots of people who are very poor because of unfair reasons.
>> There are lots of people who are very poor because of unfair reasons.

But, everyone shoudn't break laws.
>> No one should break the law. 

So I think he have to be punished.
>> So I think he has to be punished. 
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