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What are some of your bad habits and how do you think are you going to get rid of it?

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when I consider something deeply, I always shake my leg. My parents and many teachers give attention to me. but I can't fix it until now. I try to fix it so I just little shake my leg than before.

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Hi Tobby!

Most of the time, bad habits are simply a way of dealing with stress and boredom. Everything from biting your nails to overspending on a shopping spree to drinking every weekend to wasting time on the internet can be a simple response to stress and boredom.

But it doesn't have to be that way. You can teach yourself new and healthy ways to deal with stress and boredom, which you can then substitute in place of your bad habits.

Thank you for making an effort in answering your homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon.

when I consider something deeply, I always shake my leg. 
>> When I am thinking deeply, I always shake my leg. 

My parents and many teachers give attention to me. 
>> My parents and many teachers notice it but I still can't fix it until now. 

but I can't fix it until now. 
>> CONNECT WITH THE SENTENCE ABOVE.

I try to fix it so I just little shake my leg than before.
>> I try to fix it by doing it less. 
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