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Q:What are the physical effects of getting angry?
A:First physical effect of getting angry is I don't say anything with anyone until I am not angry.
Second physical effect is sometimes I hit something hard when I am very angry, but it's not always.
Last physical effect of angry is my foreheads' temperature rises, so my forehead is hot when I am angry.

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Hello Paul!

Thank you for doing your homework. :)

I understand that English could be really difficult.

But it only takes faith and confidence in yourself to perfect it.

You are a smart person and I know that with constant practice you will do great¡¦ ^_^

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T. Christina ^^

Here are my corrections for you:


First physical effect of getting angry is I don't say anything with anyone until I am not angry.

>> First, one physical effect of getting angry is I don't say anything to anyone until I am not angry anymore.
Second physical effect is sometimes I hit something hard when I am very angry, but it's not always.

>> Second is sometimes I hit something hard when I am very angry, but I don't always do this.
Last physical effect of angry is my foreheads' temperature rises, so my forehead is hot when I am angry.

>> Lastly, my forehead's temperature rises, so my forehead is hot when I am angry.

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