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As development of internet, there are plenty of information on the website. 
>> As technology continuously develops there are plenty of information on the website. 
The first thing I did if I want to know about something is accessing the internet and find out the information that are related with my question.
>>> The first thing I do if I want to know about something is accessing the internet and find out the answer to my  question.
 There are many professionals actively put comments on the user's questions and it is quite reliable answers. 
>>>  There are many professionals who actively upload their comments on the user's questions and they have quite reliable answers. 
It is said that Google engine can provide all the information regardless of the subjects.
>>> CORRECT
 However, people who don't have special knowledge copy other's answer and sometimes modify it that might be resulted in wrong information.
>>>  However, people who don't have special knowledge copy other's answer and sometimes modify them which may result to wrong information.
 I think people are afraid of knowing their disease so they just ask it on the internet and would like to find the answer that they would be OK.
>>> CORRECT ( Yeah! I agree, it's me, kkk )
 It's really a serious problem because people simply believe unprofessional's answer and make their disease more serious.
>>> CORRECT
 For example, herbal medicine is known for the alternative treatment option if patients don't have any possibility to be treated with current techniques.
>>>  For example, herbal medicine is known for alternative treatment option if patients are not capable of current techniques.
 But oriental medicine...
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