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Thanks to medical development
In a wah, Humankind have more informatio about diseases.

But there are several diseases like corona virus, cancels which we couldn't reveal the cause of occurance.

so we must not be arrogant.

Among the rest, I am afraid of cancels,

Because my mother was die from brain tumor.

Because Humankind is vulnerable by dieseases, we must be careful and exercise everyday.

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Hello, Chris! ^^
I am sorry to hear about your loss.
We should really be healthy~

- T. Rina


1. Thanks to medical development
>> CORRECT!

2. In a wah, Humankind have more informatio about diseases.
>> Humankind has more information about diseases.

3. But there are several diseases like corona virus, cancels which we couldn't reveal the cause of occurance.
>> But there are several diseases like Corona virus and cancer which the occurrences couldn't be revealed or known.

4. so we must not be arrogant.
>> CORRECT!

5. Among the rest, I am afraid of cancels, Because my mother was die from brain tumor.
>> Among the diseases, I am most afraid of cancer because my mother died from brain tumor.

6. Because Humankind is vulnerable by dieseases, we must be careful and exercise everyday.
>> Because humankind is vulnerable to diseases, we must be careful and exercise everyday.
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