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Healthcare system of Korea is Helpful

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I think Korean healthcare system is well organized. Korea has one of the greatest healthcare system compared to other countries. The quality of the system is high. And the cost is very cheap because most of Koreans have the national health insurance. So, people can go to hospital easily. In USA, on the other hand, the cost for treatment is expensive because private sector offers the insurance. There is a joke that it is more cheaper to come to Korea and treat than receiving treatment in USA. Moreover, the speed is really fast. I've heard it needs a lot time to treat some simple diseases in other countries. But, people can go to hospital and get treatment for their disease in Korea. Thus, in my opinion the healthcare system of Korea is convenience and helpful.

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Good afternoon Jennifer! 
I think there is no perfect system, but at least the system helps a lot of people. 
I would also consider having a medical insurance in case. 

I think Korean healthcare system is well organized. 
>>> CORRECT! 
Korea has one of the greatest healthcare system compared to other countries. 
>>> CORRECT! 
OR: Korea has the best medical system compared to other countries.
he quality of the system is high. 
>>> The quality of the system is high.
And the cost is very cheap because most of Koreans have the national health insurance. 
>>> CORRECT! 
So, people can go to hospital easily. 
>>> CORRECT! 
OR: So people can go to the hospital easily.
In USA, on the other hand, the cost for treatment is expensive because private sector offers the insurance.
>>> In the USA, on the other hand, the cost of treatment is expensive because private sector offers the insurance.
There is a joke that it is more cheaper to come to Korea and treat than receiving treatment in USA. 
>>> There is a joke that it is cheaper to come to Korea and treat than receiving treatment in USA. 
Moreover, the speed is really fast.
>>> CORRECT! 
OR: Besides, it's really fast.
I've heard it needs a lot time to treat some simple diseases in other countries. 
>>> CORRECT! 
OR: I heard that in other countries, time is needed to treat simple diseases.
But, people can go to hospital and get treatment for their disease in Korea. 
>>> But, people can go to the hospital and get treatment for their disease in Korea. 
Thus, in my opinion the healthcare system of Korea is convenience and helpful.
>>> Thus, in my opinion the healthcare system of Korea is convenient and helpful.

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