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Theme: [ESSAY] What's your thought on air pollution?
I think people have to take care of air and notice about air pollution.
People have to notice the sky color and their daughter and son's generations.
People have to became using electric cars and electric products.
People have to take care of air and sky!

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Here's your second corrected homework this week, Clair!
Also, just to remind you once more, if it's possible to start the class early at our next session so we can make up for the lost time today. See you then! 

Cheers,
Jean~~


                                     Theme: [ESSAY] What's your thought on air pollution?


I think people have to take care of air and notice about air pollution.
>> I believe people have to take care of the air and be more conscious about air pollution.

People have to notice the sky color and their daughter and son's generations.
>> People have to pay attention to the sky color and their daughter and son's generations.

People have to became using electric cars and electric products.
>> People have to adapt to electric cars and other electric products.

People have to take care of air and sky!
>> People have to take care of the air and the sky!

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