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Are there any sweet foods from your country that you\'d recommend trying?

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There are a lot of sweet foods in our country.
Specially, I would like to recommend rice cake called "tteok".
It's a healthy food made from rice.
It's not only sweet but also chewy.
I heard that most foreigers like rice cakes because of their taste and texture.
Normal cakes do not have many ingredients like whipped cream cakes or chocolate cakes,
but there are many types of rice cakes.
Its ingredient can be anything.
Also, its shape is diverse.
I love all kinds of rice cakes.

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Good afternoon Jennifer! 
Yeah, me too! 
Rice cake was introduced to me since 2012. 
At first I didn't like it because it was just chewy. But I had it again for the second time and it was a different recipe - I loved it! 
Rice cake please! 
There are a lot of sweet foods in our country.
>>> CORRECT! 
Specially, I would like to recommend rice cake called "tteok".
>>> CORRECT!
It's a healthy food made from rice.
>>> CORRECT!
It's not only sweet but also chewy.
>>> CORRECT!
I heard that most foreigers like rice cakes because of their taste and texture.
>>> I heard that most foreigners like rice cakes because of their taste and texture.
Normal cakes do not have many ingredients like whipped cream cakes or chocolate cakes, but there are many types of rice cakes.
>>> CORRECT!
Its ingredient can be anything.
>>> Its ingredients can be anything.
Also, its shape is diverse.
>>> CORRECT! 
OR: It also has various shapes.
I love all kinds of rice cakes.
>>> CORRECT! 
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