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How different do you think is the generation now from the generation before?

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First, now, it is a digital generation so we can do a lot of things with a digital device.
We can do a lot of things woth our smart phones, even tough we can control our cars by our smart phones.
Second, there is no any discriminations about race, gender and age.
So we are able to do a lot of things because of our rights about we shouldn't be discriminated by other people.
Third, a lot of neologisms were made by various people, and they use them a lot.
It is fun to speak neologisms, but some people might not able to understand the neologisms.

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Hi John! :)

I think this is true. The generations before is very different from now. It varies in different aspects like technology, fashion, education and etc. 

I think your answer is great. :) 

Thank you for making an effort in answering your homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon.

First, now, it is a digital generation so we can do a lot of things with a digital device.
>> First, the generation now is all digital. We can do a lot of things with a digital devices.

We can do a lot of things woth our smart phones, even tough we can control our cars by our smart phones.
>> We can do things with our smart phone, even our cars. 

Second, there is no any discriminations about race, gender and age.
>> Second, there is no discrimination about race, gender and age anymore unlike before. 

So we are able to do a lot of things because of our rights about we shouldn't be discriminated by other people.
>> With that, we are more free than before so we can do things that we want without being discriminated by other people. 

Third, a lot of neologisms were made by various people, and they use them a lot.
>> Third, a lot of neologisms were made by various people and they are being used a lot. 

It is fun to speak neologisms, but some people might not able to understand the neologisms.
>> It is fun to speak about neologisms, but some people might not able to understand it. 


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