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What quality do you admire most in people and which one do you find the most objectionable?

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I look up to humble people who follow God. I have some good mentors nearby me. When I see them, I am challenged by them because I also want to become kind of like that. They want to appear God more than them in their life. During the hard times, they always confess God to thanks. They have humble traits mostly. Humble people don't want to judge their situation as immediately as a human's thought. They want to wait for the best answer from God. And then they pray. Prayer is stronger than anything. So I want to learn to grow from them. On the other hand, I don't like gossiping people. Some of their traits are that they like to judge people easily and spread bad words quickly. When I meet these kinds of people, I want to save my words. I just try to avoid them because I don't want to argue. Most people, when people talk about bad words or complain, they become more close to each other. I don't want to be in this situation. So sometimes I'm lonely.
Congratulations on your study M.A.!

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I totally agree with you, Jane! I also think it's dangerous to associate with those kinds of people. Stay safe!-Faith-
I look up to humble people who follow God. 
>> CORRECT
I have some good mentors nearby me. 
>> I have some good mentors near me. 
When I see them, I am challenged by them because I also want to become kind of like that. 
>> CORRECT
They want to appear God more than them in their life. 
>> They want to show God in their lives more than themselves. 
During the hard times, they always confess God to thanks. 
>> During their hard times, they always confess to God and thank Him. 
They have humble traits mostly. 
>> CORRECT
OR They are meek.
Humble people don't want to judge their situation as immediately as a human's thought. 
>> Humble people don't want to judge their situation as immediately as humans' thought. 
They want to wait for the best answer from God. 
>> CORRECT
And then they pray. 
>> CORRECT
Prayer is stronger than anything. 
>> CORRECT
So I want to learn to grow from them. 
>> So I want to learn from them to grow. 
On the other hand, I don't like gossiping people. 
>> On the other hand, I don't like gossipers. 
Some of their traits are that they like to judge people easily and spread bad words quickly. 
>> CORRECT
OR Some of them judge people easily and spread nasty gossips quickly. 
When I meet these kinds of people, I want to save my words. 
>> CORRECT
I just try to avoid them because I don't want to argue. 
>> CORRECT
Most people, when people talk about bad words or complain, they become more close to each other. 
>> Most people become closer to each other when they speak ill of somebody or complain about someone. 
I don't want to be in this situation. 
>> CORRECT
So sometimes I'm lonely.
>> CORRECT
Congratulations on your study M.A.!
>> Congratulations on your M.A. studies!
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