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I think it is important to eat vegetables.
That is because when we eat vegetables, we will be very tall.
My second reason is when we eat vegetables, we will be healthy.
My third reason is when we eat vegetables with meat, it is very yummy.
Finally, vegetables are have many water. And water is very important by body.

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Hi, Joey!   You have answered the question appropriately. Your sentence construction is getting better. Very good! 

- Teacher Debbie


I think it is important to eat vegetables.

>> This is a good sentence. 

That is because when we eat vegetables, we will be very tall.
>> This is a good sentence. 

My second reason is when we eat vegetables, we will be healthy.
>> The second reason is when we eat vegetables, we will be healthy.

Finally, vegetables are have many water. And water is very important by body.

>> The third reason is vegetables have a lot of water,  and water is very important for the body.


My third reason is when we eat vegetables with meat, it is very yummy.

>> Moreover, eating vegetables with meat is yummy.



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