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Many people love France because there are many beautiful places like Eiffel tower, Seine river and Champs-Elysees.
When I saw Eiffel tower on a boat at Seine river after the sunset, I absolutely fell into it.
But I was upset when they just spoke french even though they were able to speak and understand English.
I could¡¯t understand what they were trying to say.
But I totally agree that France has it¡¯s own mood that any other European countries don¡¯t have.

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Hi Jinny!
Please take note of the suggestions below.
There are parts that you need to keep in mind.
They are usually used in daily conversation English.
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Thanks!^^
~~ Teacher Sharon
Many people love France because there are many beautiful places like Eiffel tower, Seine river and Champs-Elysees.
>> Many people love France because there are many beautiful places like the Eiffel Tower, Seine river and Champs-Elysees.
When I saw Eiffel tower on a boat at Seine river after the sunset, I absolutely fell into it.
>> When I saw the Eiffel Tower on a boat at Seine river after the sunset, I absolutely fell in love with it.
But I was upset when they just spoke french even though they were able to speak and understand English.
>> However, I was upset when they just spoke French even though they were able to speak and understand English.
I could¡¯t understand what they were trying to say.
>> I couldn't understand what they were trying to say.
But I totally agree that France has it¡¯s own mood that any other European countries don¡¯t have.
>> However, I totally agree that France has its own mood that any other European countries don¡¯t have.
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