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What are your bad behaviors and how are you going to change them?

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One of my bad behaviors is not exercising.
I am well aware that I have to exercise to prevent muscle loss.
But I hate exercise so much. It seems to me more difficult than others .
I signed up for a gym to exercise consistently.
Also I do stretching before going to bed.

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Hi Jennifer:)

Bad habits interrupt your life and prevent you from accomplishing your goals. They jeopardize your health - both mentally and physically. And they waste your time and energy.

Thank you for making an effort in answering your homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon.

One of my bad behaviors is not exercising.
>> CORRECT

I am well aware that I have to exercise to prevent muscle loss.
>> CORRECT

But I hate exercise so much. 
>> But I hate exercising so much. 

It seems to me more difficult than others .
>> It seems more difficult for me than others. 

I signed up for a gym to exercise consistently.
>> CORRECT

Also I do stretching before going to bed. 
>> CORRECT
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