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Homework: What do you like most about Korea¡¯s culture?

Even though I¡¯m relatively a laid-back person for a Korean, I do enjoy the aspect of Korean rushing almost everything. Koreans in general like things to be done promptly, and rarely forgive any unexplained delay. It is no exception for general social services. Therefore for social service workers, their job can be nerve-wrecking because they are demanded to process everything as fast as possible. While this characteristic of Korean society definitely has it¡¯s downsides, Korean people in general benefit from it without noticing.
I recognized the benefit of having a fast social service while I was not under the influence of it. While I was in Canada, I was shocked to have anything done no less than a week. Even the simplest services I could ask for needed weeks to be processed. I understand that in Canada, oftentimes resources go first to the ones in desperate need such as refugees.

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Hi, Eunbee! Thanks for doing your homework. You managed to observe the proper verb tense in the entire essay. However, be careful with your spelling please.


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Even though I¡¯m relatively a laid-back person for a Korean, I do enjoy the aspect of Korean rushing almost everything. 
>> Even though I¡¯m relatively a laid-back person for a Korean, I do enjoy the aspect of Koreans rushing almost everything. 

Koreans in general like things to be done promptly, and rarely forgive any unexplained delay. It is no exception for general social services. 
>> Koreans in general like things to be done promptly, and social services are no exception. They rarely forgive any unexplained delay. 

Therefore for social service workers, their job can be nerve-wrecking because they are demanded to process everything as fast as possible. 
>> Therefore, for social service workers, their jobs can be nerve-wracking because they are demanded to process everything as fast as possible. 

While this characteristic of Korean society definitely has it¡¯s downsides, Korean people in general benefit from it without noticing.
>> While this characteristic of Korean society has its downside, Koreans in general benefit from it without noticing.

I recognized the benefit of having a fast social service while I was not under the influence of it. 
>> I recognized the benefit of having a fast social service while I was away.

While I was in Canada, I was shocked to have anything done no less than a week.
>> This is a good sentence.

 Even the simplest services I could ask for needed weeks to be processed.
>> This is a good sentence.

 I understand that in Canada, oftentimes resources go first to the ones in desperate need such as refugees.
>> I understand that Canada's resources often go first to the ones in desperate need, such as refugees.

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