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I always use Naver and Daum, which are Korean websites, and Google, which is served as various languages. Nowadays, websites give us essential information for everyday life, which can be newspapers, a dictionary, counseling, novel, or directions, etc. In addition, its convenience is a great advantage whenever we need to know exact information. We can ask or search websites in any time. The device to use website is also portable and light, and so we are carrying those devices in the hand.
Information that I want to know most is related to where I am living now, here, Korea. That¡¯s why I usually use Korean website to get what I look for. In contrast, when I am out of Korea, I use google more that Korean websites because google is an international website. When I enjoy listening to or watching music video, prequel or sequel of movies, or video clips, I click Youtube. I think if website becomes popular, It should be written in English and it had better offer specific categories.

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Those are really good applications and websites :) Thanks for sharing. 

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I always use Naver and Daum, which are Korean websites, and Google, which is served as various languages. 
>> I always use Naver and Daum, which are Korean websites. I also use Google, which is served in various languages. 

Nowadays, websites give us essential information for everyday life, which can be newspapers, a dictionary, counseling, novel, or directions, etc. 
>> Nowadays, websites give us essential information for everyday life, which can be newspapers, dictionaries, counseling, novels, directions, and etc. 

In addition, its convenience is a great advantage whenever we need to know exact information. 
>> CORRECT

We can ask or search websites in any time. 
>> We can ask or search websites any time. 

The device to use website is also portable and light, and so we are carrying those devices in the hand.
>> The device to use website is also portable and light, which can let us carry it by hand. 

Information that I want to know most is related to where I am living now, here, Korea. 
>> It can give access to information I want to receive that is mostly related to the place I am living now which is South Korea. 

That¡¯s why I usually use Korean website to get what I look for. 
>> That¡¯s why I usually use Korean websites to get what I am looking for. 

In contrast, when I am out of Korea, I use google more that Korean websites because google is an international website. 
>> CORRECT

When I enjoy listening to or watching music video, prequel or sequel of movies, or video clips, I click Youtube. 
>> When I want to enjoy listening to music or watching videos, prequels or sequels of movie, I usually use YouTube. 

I think if website becomes popular, It should be written in English and it had better offer specific categories.
>> I think if a website becomes popular, it should be written in English and needs to have specific categories. 
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