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Do you have any collections? Tell me about it. If not, what would you like to collect and why?

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I have Lego collection in my room.
When I was young, I was a big fan of Lego bricks.
So I started to collect them and I have many kinds of Lego bricks.
I am still a fan of Lego brick, and I am collecting Starwars Lego.
I think Starwars Lego bricks are the best Lego brick series that I've ever seen.
And there are a lot of high quality Lego bricks so adults can enjoy them.

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Hi John:)

That's a nice collection you have there. Maybe the worth of that may increase as time goes by. Take good care of it because who knows? Right?

Thank you for making an effort in answering your homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon.

I have Lego collection in my room.
>> I have a Lego collection in my room. 

When I was young, I was a big fan of Lego bricks.
>> CORRECT

So I started to collect them and I have many kinds of Lego bricks.
>> So I started to collect them and now I have many kinds of Lego bricks.

I am still a fan of Lego brick, and I am collecting Starwars Lego.
>> I am still a fan of Lego bricks, and I am collecting the Star Wars Lego.

I think Starwars Lego bricks are the best Lego brick series that I've ever seen.
>> CORRECT

And there are a lot of high quality Lego bricks so adults can enjoy them.
>> CORRECT
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