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Korean creature named Hatae.

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The most popular Korean creature is named Hatae. It's a creature that protect Seoul and keep judgement. So it is very good creature to Korean. And it appearance is lion+turtle. lastly, there are lots of Hatae in North-east Asia, but there is only good Hatae in Korea.
(Movie diary) I watched movie called AK-47, that is about very famous rifle called AK-47. So, I will explain about it.
This rifle is from Russia. It was second AR around the world. Maker of this gun thought about strong, and fast rate of fire. It is called AR. The first AR is stg44, it was an very big evolution. Whole world needed this AR. So in Russia, the AR called AK-47 was adapted. It was very durable and good rate of fire. And it was very cheap, so lots of poor terrorist used it. Because of these reasons, about 44890000 people were died because of this guns. So this is very historic guns.

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Hello, Daniel!  Your homework is well-organized and easy to understand. Good job! However, focus on subject-verb agreement please.

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The most popular Korean creature is named Hatae. 
>> This is a good sentence.

It's a creature that protect Seoul and keep judgement.
>> It's the creature that protects Seoul and gives judgement.

So it is very good creature to Korean.
>> Therefore, it is very good to Koreans.

 And it appearance is lion+turtle. 
>> It looks like a lion and a turtle.

lastly, there are lots of Hatae in North-east Asia, but there is only good Hatae in Korea.
>> Lastly, there are lots of hataes in Northeast Asia, but there is only good Hatae in Korea.


Movie Diary

I watched movie called AK-47, that is about very famous rifle called AK-47. 
>> I watched a movie called AK-47. It is about a very famous rifle called AK-47.

So, I will explain about it.
>> I will write about it.

This rifle is from Russia.
>> This is a good sentence.

 It was second AR around the world. 
>> It was the second AR around the world.

Maker of this gun thought about strong, and fast rate of fire. 
>> The maker of this gun thought about powerful and fast-fire-rate guns.

It is called AR. 
>> They called them AR.

The first AR is stg44, it was an very big evolution. 
>> The first AR was StG44. It was a very big evolution.

Whole world needed this AR. 
>> The whole world needed this AR.

So in Russia, the AR called AK-47 was adapted.
>> Therefore, in Russia, the AR was called AK-47.

 It was very durable and good rate of fire. 
>> It was very durable and has a good fire rate.

And it was very cheap, so lots of poor terrorist used it. 
>> Moreover, it was very cheap, so lots of poor terrorists used it.

Because of these reasons, about 44890000 people were died because of this guns.
>> Because of these reasons, about 448,900,00 people died.

So this is very historic guns
>>  Therefore, this is a very dangerous gun.
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