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Getting older

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I'm afraid getting old.
Because I'm not trust my self on my own future life.
My job is musical actor, freelancer I can fix it my schedule if I want but I can not get the pay normally usual.
Some season if I have very many work, I get the many money.
But some season if I don't have a work, I can't get the money.
Example, covid 19 pendemic season is very hard to me.
And every stage actor getting hard time.
That's why I afraid get old.

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Hi Ann:) 

I think at some point, we are all afraid of getting old. There are some advantages and disadvantages to it. If we get old, we gain wisdom and experiences. The down side is that, we get weaker and weaker. 

Thank you for making an effort in answering your first homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon.

-Teacher Elise

I'm afraid getting old.
>> I'm afraid of getting old. 

Because I'm not trust my self on my own future life.
>> It's because I don't trust myself when it comes to the future. 

My job is musical actor, freelancer I can fix it my schedule if I want but I can not get the pay normally usual.
>> My job is a musical actor which is a freelancer. I am the one managing my time but I don't get payed normally like other office employees. 

Some season if I have very many work, I get the many money.
>> Some seasons, I have a lot of projects so I get a lot of money. 

But some season if I don't have a work, I can't get the money.
>> But there are also some seasons that I don't have a lot of projects so I don't get a lot of money. 

Example, covid 19 pendemic season is very hard to me.
>> For example, the pandemic season has been very hard for me. 

And every stage actor getting hard time.
>> Every stage actor had a hard time. 

That's why I afraid get old.
>>> That's why I am afraid of getting old. 
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