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Why my favorite cartoon character is mickey mouse

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My favorite cartoon character is mickey mouse.
That is because a lot of people know mickey mouse.
My second reason is mickey mouse's birth is very good.
My third reason is mickey mouse is easy to draw.
Finally, mickey mouse are very famous.

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Hi, Joey! Thank you for doing your homework. Please take note of the corrections.  Keep on writing to improve your writing skills. 

- Teacher Debbie

My favorite cartoon character is mickey mouse.
>> My favorite cartoon character is Mickey Mouse.

That is because a lot of people know mickey mouse.
>> A lot of people know him.

My second reason is mickey mouse's birth is very good.
>> What do you mean?

My third reason is mickey mouse is easy to draw.
>> He is my favorite because he is easy to draw.

Finally, mickey mouse are very famous.
>> Moreover, he is very famous.
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