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Christmas is special holiday.
I think carol song it makes atmosphere to more big.
Christmas equal Mariah Carey All I wants to christmas with you song.
And bell sounds every place turn on the pretty lights.
I don't know about other Korean opinion.
But I think christmas is special holiday :)

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Hi Ann:) 

For Filipinos, Christmas is the most important holiday ever. It is a very joyful occasion. That song is also played everywhere here. Hahaha!

Thank you for making an effort in answering your first homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon.

Christmas is special holiday.
>> Christmas is a special day. 

I think carol song it makes atmosphere to more big.
>> I think carol songs make the atmosphere better. 
 
Christmas equal Mariah Carey All I wants to christmas with you song.
>> Christmas means, "All I want for Christmas is you" song by Mariah Carey 

And bell sounds every place turn on the pretty lights.
>> There will be bell sounds all over the place and pretty lights as well. 

I don't know about other Korean opinion.
>> I don't know if other Koreans have the same opinion but I think that Christmas is a special holiday. 

But I think christmas is special holiday :)
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