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Do you think marriage is important? Why or why not?

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No, I don't. I think that marriage is not important because marriage is not all of life. Without husband or wife, I can do many things, but I will be lonely. However, I think that advantages are more than disadvantages. So, I think that marriage is not important. However, I want marry in the future because I always thought that if I live with my husband and children like my family, I will be very happy. I want to make a peaceful family like my family! (My family means my current family.)

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Hi Kimberly:)

Marriage is the beginning—the beginning of the family—and is a life-long commitment. It also provides an opportunity to grow in selflessness as you serve your wife and children. Marriage is more than a physical union; it is also a spiritual and emotional union. This union mirrors the one between God and His Church. 

Still, it's not for everyone. 

Thank you for making an effort in answering your first homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon!

No, I don't. 
>> CORRECT

I think that marriage is not important because marriage is not all of life. 
>> I think that marriage is not important because it is not the only thing in life. 

Without husband or wife, I can do many things, but I will be lonely.
>> I can do many things when I am not married but I will be lonely. 

However, I think that advantages are more than disadvantages. 
>> However, I think there are more advantages that disadvantages to it. 

So, I think that marriage is not important. 
>> CORRECT

However, I want marry in the future because I always thought that if I live with my husband and children like my family, I will be very happy. 
>> However, I want marry in the future because I always thought that if I live with my husband and children, I will be very happy. 

I want to make a peaceful family like my family!
>> CORRECT
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