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Which one do you think is better, living in a country that has 2 seasons or 4 seasons? Explain your

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In my opinion, living in a country that has 4 seasons is better than living in a country that has 2 seasons.
If we live in an area that has 4 seasons, we can prepare for next seasons very easily.
The seasons change smoothly, so we can adjust easily than 2 seasons.
If we live in an area that has 2 seasons, the seasons will change suddenly, so we can be hard to adjust in the seasons.
And also I adjusted in the area that has 4 seasons, so I am comfortable with 4 seasons.
And also we can experience more things by living in the 4 seasons.
So in my opinion, living in a country that has 4 seasons is better than living in a country that has 2 seasons.

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Hi John:)

Yes, I envy your country. You can do various activities every season. I wish we can experience that too!. 

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In my opinion, living in a country that has 4 seasons is better than living in a country that has 2 seasons.
>> CORRECT

If we live in an area that has 4 seasons, we can prepare for next seasons very easily.
>> CORRECT

The seasons change smoothly, so we can adjust easily than 2 seasons.
>> The seasons change smoothly, so we can adjust easily. 

If we live in an area that has 2 seasons, the seasons will change suddenly, so we can be hard to adjust in the seasons.
>> If we live in an area that has 2 seasons, the seasons will change suddenly, so it would be hard for us to adjust. 

And also I adjusted in the area that has 4 seasons, so I am comfortable with 4 seasons.
>> Also, I am used to living in a place with 4 seasons so it's more comfortable for me. 

And also we can experience more things by living in the 4 seasons.
>> We can experience more things with it as well. 

So in my opinion, living in a country that has 4 seasons is better than living in a country that has 2 seasons.
>> CORRECT
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