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My dream house is made of eco-friendly materials and it has to be a detached house because I like that I don't have to take care of flour noises.

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Hi Kane! 

That sounds like a great house and those are important key points to consider in building it. 

Thank you for making an effort in answering your first homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon. 

My dream house is made of eco-friendly materials and it has to be a detached house because I like that I don't have to take care of flour noises.
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