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What do you think should the government do regarding the air pollution in South Korea?

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It's a tough question, I'm hard to answer it. But I think the government should try to reduce the use of plastic. It's because South Korea has the highest consumption of plastic in the world so it has to reduce it. And people should take a public transportation. We need to reduce using a car for decreasing the air pollution.

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It's a tough question, I'm hard to answer it. 
>> It's a tough question. 

But I think the government should try to reduce the use of plastic. 
>> I think the government should try to reduce the use of plastic. 

It's because South Korea has the highest consumption of plastic in the world so it has to reduce it. 
>> It's because South Korea has the highest consumption of plastic in the world so it has to be reduced. 

And people should take a public transportation. 
>> And people should take public transportation. 

We need to reduce using a car for decreasing the air pollution. 
>>  We need to use the usage of cars to decrease air pollution. 
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