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Do you think robots or AI will replace human teachers in the future? Why?

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I think it's not possible to replace robot or AI to human teachers.
Because many people don't have their own willpower.
For example, many people want to be slim. so many people try to do exercise.
but not all people become successful. when we meet an autual trainer, we can exercise better.
Equally AI teachers can teach better than human teachers. but AI teachers can't coach better than human teachers.

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Thank you for making an effort in answering your first homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon.

I think it's not possible to replace robot or AI to human teachers.
>> I think it's not possible to replace human teachers with robots or AI. 

Because many people don't have their own willpower.
>> It because many people don't have their own willpower.

For example, many people want to be slim. so many people try to do exercise.
>> For example, many people want to be slim so many people try to exercise.

but not all people become successful. when we meet an autual trainer, we can exercise better.
>> But not all people are successful with this. If we meet a great trainer, we can exercise better. 

Equally AI teachers can teach better than human teachers. but AI teachers can't coach better than human teachers.
>> At some point, AI teachers can teach better than human teachers but they can't coach better than human teachers.

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