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If you had to choose between a satisfying job and a well-paid one, which would you choose?

작성자: 김*연
2022-09-17 2089

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This question was a dilemma for me until 5 years ago. However not now. I prefer a well-paid job more then a satisfying job. And I want to suggest a condition about the meaning of 'well-paid'. It means the regular and stable salary, not only the highly-paid. These days I realized that I cannot get a self-realization through a job. Every fields of job can give me a stress even I like the field. I think that is an unavoidable truth about 'Job'. So I think a job have to be a well-paid one. After then, I can try to satisfy in there. Satisfaction is option in job society. Maybe you can think that I am a materialistic person. However, it is a real life. Don't sink into the illusion dreaming anymore. We can find a satisfaction with a well-paid job.

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Hi Arissa,

Thank you for sending your answer to me. It was well-thought and I think it's an awesome answer.
I wouldn't say you are a materialistic person. Rather, I would say you are realistic and logical.
What I like most about your answer was about satisfaction and stress; because it's true. 
Being satisfied is an option. Its us who can decide if it is satisfying or not based on our own definition of the word.
Stress is always there whether we are satisfied or not too.

Thank you for sharing your thoughts. See you in our next class! 
Have a good night! ^^ 

~ Teacher Gina


This question was a dilemma for me until 5 years ago. However not now. I prefer a well-paid job more then a satisfying job. And I want to suggest a condition about the meaning of 'well-paid'. It means the regular and stable salary, not only the highly-paid. These days I realized that I cannot get a self-realization through a job. Every fields of job can give me a stress even I like the field. I think that is an unavoidable truth about 'Job'. So I think a job have to be a well-paid one. After then, I can try to satisfy in there. Satisfaction is option in job society. Maybe you can think that I am a materialistic person. However, it is a real life. Don't sink into the illusion dreaming anymore. We can find a satisfaction with a well-paid job.

>> This question was a dilemma for me until five years ago. However, not now. I prefer a well-paid job more than a satisfying job. And I want to suggest a condition about the meaning of 'well-paid.' It means a regular and stable salary, not only highly paid. These days I realize that I cannot get self-realization through a job. Every field of job can stress me even if I like the field. I think that is an unavoidable truth about 'Jobs.' So I think a job has to be a well-paid one. After then, I can try to be satisfied there. Satisfaction is an option in the job society. Maybe you can think that I am a materialistic person. However, it is real life. Don't sink into the illusion of dreaming anymore. We can find satisfaction with a well-paid job.
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