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I agree that alternative medicine obtained through tradition is utilized to some extent.

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Alternative medicine is an underused word for me. However, we know that modern medicine cannot cure all human diseases. So when there is no way to do it with modern medicine, I sometimes hear attempts to treat illness through alternative medicine. And although it has not been scientifically proven, we know that traditional alternative medicine is used for more effective treatment or especially prevention. As we all know, science isn't perfect. I agree that alternative medicine obtained through tradition is utilized to some extent.

Prayer: God Many people are struggling with illness or accidents. I don't know why that difficulty happened to them. father. Comfort those who are in the midst of difficulties right now, and help them realize your will in the midst of difficulties. And help them get through the situation well. In the name of Jesus we pray. amen

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Hello, Elliot. This is just impressive. Thank you for putting your time and effort to complete the homework. Only minimal grammatical corrections were given. Again, great job and keep it up. Have a good night. ~Jane c",) 


I agree that alternative medicine obtained through tradition is utilized to some extent.
>> CORRECT =) 

Alternative medicine is an underused word for me. 
>> CORRECT =) 

However, we know that modern medicine cannot cure all human diseases. 
>> CORRECT =) 

So when there is no way to do it with modern medicine, I sometimes hear attempts to treat illness through alternative medicine. 
>> CORRECT =) 

And although it has not been scientifically proven, we know that traditional alternative medicine is used for more effective treatment or especially prevention. 
>> CORRECT =) 

As we all know, science isn't perfect. 
>> CORRECT =) 

I agree that alternative medicine obtained through tradition is utilized to some extent.
>> CORRECT =) 

Prayer: 
God Many people are struggling with illness or accidents. 
>> God, many people are struggling with illnesses or accidents. 

I don't know why that difficulty happened to them. father. 
>> I don't know why that difficulty happened to them, Father. 

Comfort those who are in the midst of difficulties right now, and help them realize your will in the midst of difficulties. 
>> CORRECT =) 

And help them get through the situation well. 
>> CORRECT =) 

In the name of Jesus we pray. amen
>> In the name of Jesus, we pray, amen.

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