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People¡¯s eating habits have changed slow food to the fast food. At the past, people cooked themselves at home. But nowadays, they often eat out such as using delivery services or going to the restaurant. They save the time by paying out.
On another hand, people is willing to pay for coffee and dessert. I guess people think eating is a gift for themselves.

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Happy Wednesday, Robin!
I agree with what you've mentioned. People nowadays don't care about how much the delivery fee is and if they will be spending more money by eating out as long as it's more convenient for them.
-T. Caitlyn
People¡¯s eating habits have changed slow food to the fast food.
>> People's eating habits have changed from slow food to fast food.
 At the past, people cooked themselves at home. But nowadays, they often eat out such as using delivery services or going to the restaurant. 
>> In the past, people cooked at home but nowadays, they often eat out in restaurants or order using food delivery services.
They save the time by paying out.
>> They save time by just paying.
On another hand, people is willing to pay for coffee and dessert. 
>> On the other hand, people are willing to pay for coffee and desserts.
I guess people think eating is a gift for themselves.
>> I guess people think that eating is a reward for themselves.
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