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I think some restrictions are needed.
Since we are animals that live together, I think there should be a limit to words that hurt others.
Of course, I think this restriction should be settled in everyone's conscience rather than a matter that must be followed as the law does.

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Hello Da Hye,
I wanted to tell you that I appreciate how you always do your homework. You show that you understand the importance of studying. I also wanted to share my thoughts about what we talked about recently. It's important to have some rules in life. But I believe that these rules should come from within us, from our own sense of right and wrong, rather than being forced on us by laws. By doing your homework, you already show that you take responsibility for your work. Keep that attitude as you keep learning and growing. Remember to think about how your words and actions can affect others. Keep up the good work, and stay enthusiastic about your studies.
~Teacher Cathy

I think some restrictions are needed.
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OR>>I think some restrictions are necessary.
Since we are animals that live together, I think there should be a limit to words that hurt others.
>>Since we live together as social beings, I believe there should be limits to words that can harm others.
Of course, I think this restriction should be settled in everyone's conscience rather than a matter that must be followed as the law does.
>>Of course, I believe these restrictions should be established within the conscience of each individual rather than being mandated as a matter of law.
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