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I think knowledge is power.

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I think it's power.
Knowledge can always have a good influence on me, and it makes me enlighten what I didn't think of.
But I don't think the best way to live happily in the world looking at my sister is to be knowledgeable.
My sister has always been told she doesn't have common sense at home, but she's happy and grateful for everything, and she's a kid who gets along well with others.
So knowledge is definitely power, and I think it can be helpful to me, but it is not a means for me to make the world happy.

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Hi Da Hye, 

Your reflections on the power of knowledge are thoughtful and insightfulI appreciate the way you've considered different perspectives, especially highlighting the happiness and gratitude your sister brings to life. Keep exploring these ideas, and remember, your unique viewpoint adds richness to the conversation. 

~Teacher Cathy 

 

I think it's power. 

>>CORRECT 

OR>>I think it's powerful. 

Knowledge can always have a good influence on me, and it makes me enlighten what I didn't think of. 

>>Knowledge can always have a positive influence on me, enlightening me about things I hadn't considered. 

But I don't think the best way to live happily in the world looking at my sister is to be knowledgeable. 

>>But I don't think the best way to live happily in the world, looking at my sister, is to be knowledgeable. 

My sister has always been told she doesn't have common sense at home, but she's happy and grateful for everything, and she's a kid who gets along well with others. 

>>CORRECT 

OR>>My sister has always been told she doesn't have common sense at home, but she's happy and grateful for everything; she's a kid who gets along well with others 

So knowledge is definitely power, and I think it can be helpful to me, but it is not a means for me to make the world happy. 

>>CORRECT 

OR>>So, knowledge is undoubtedly powerful, and I think it can be helpful to me, but it is not a means for me to make the world happy. 

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