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Teacher Donna, first of all, thank you so much for helping me a lot!!
I really appreciated for your effort!
I hope to tell you while today's class, but I have a yoga class in the morning.
The interview wasn't that bad, and question was share my teamwork experience and how can I contribute this company.
I shared my kitchen experiences and use the words you taught like high standard service, outstanding teamwork.
It was the first round and result coming out on today or Thursday!

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Hello there, Rachel!

First of all, thank you for writing me today! I knew you had a Yoga class with your aunt and I hope that you had a great time.

It is my pleasure to help you. I like people who help themselves and can focus on the tasks well. You can stay focused and achieve what you like in your life. So keep trying the best way you can all the time. I have a strong feeling that you made it this time. I hope that the words you learned will not only be for the interview but words for you to live by daily as an outstanding and a top class person.

Read my comments and suggestions on grammar below/ Thank you for this very good sharing.

See you soon!

-T. Donna~

Teacher Donna, first of all, thank you so much for helping me a lot!!
>> Correct!

I really appreciated for your effort!
>>I really appreciated your effort!

I hope to tell you while today's class, but I have a yoga class in the morning.
>> I hope to tell you while having today's class, but I have a yoga class in the morning.

The interview wasn't that bad, and question was share my teamwork experience and how can I contribute this company.
>>The interview wasn't that bad, and questions were to share my teamwork experiences and how I can contribute this company.

I shared my kitchen experiences and use the words you taught like high standard service, outstanding teamwork.
>> I shared my kitchen experiences and used the words you taught like high standard service, outstanding teamwork.

It was the first round and result coming out on today or Thursday!
>> It was the first round and the result is coming out today or Thursday!
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