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What is the National Liberation Day of Korea about?

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National Liberation Day is the day when Korea was liberated from Japan, and Koreans hang Korean flags on the windows that day.
National Liberation Day is important day for Korean.

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                                     What is the National Liberation Day of Korea about?


National Liberation Day is the day when Korea was liberated from Japan, and Koreans hang Korean flags on the windows that day.
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National Liberation Day is important day for Korean.
>> National Liberation Day is an important day for Koreans.
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