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Well-paid and high revered profession

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회원님의 영작문

In korea, doctor may be the wealthiest profession. From old times, the professions that has expertise have been well paid. And among those professions, lawyer, judge are also very well-paid. Consequently, the existence of expertise is a standard of income. (It depends on situation, of course.)

These people are high revered, too. Because doctor is the only profession that can judge someone's life and death. Also, they can cure people. In addtion, Only supersmart person can be a doctor. Because of rarity, many people have respected this profassion.

+ This is not deeply relevant to today's topic, but thesedays severe problem of korea medical system. The medical system of korea was almost perfect for quick, precise, and convenient system in thr past. But now, the large number of doctors of korea strike their work for their position. the government and the doctor still can't narrow the discrepancy between them.

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Hello, Ms. Casey! I have read about the dispute between the medical professionals and your government. A lot of people are being affected by it so hopefully they'll do something to solve it. Thank you for sharing!
-T. Sonny
In korea, doctor may be the wealthiest profession. 
>>In Korea, being a doctor may be the wealthiest profession.
From old times, the professions that has expertise have been well paid. 
>>In the past, professions with specializations are the well-paid ones.
And among those professions, lawyer, judge are also very well-paid. 
>>And among those are being a lawyer and a judge are also thriving.
Consequently, the existence of expertise is a standard of income. 
>>Correct!
(It depends on situation, of course.)
>>(It depends on the situation, of course.)
These people are high revered, too. 
>>These people are highly revered, too.
Because doctor is the only profession that can judge someone's life and death. 
>>As I see it, being a doctor is the only profession that has the power over someone's life and death.
Also, they can cure people. 
>>Correct!
In addtion, Only supersmart person can be a doctor. 
>>In addition, only highly intelligent people can be a doctor.
Because of rarity, many people have respected this profassion.
>>Because of its rarity, many people have respect for this profession.
This is not deeply relevant to today's topic, but thesedays severe problem of korea medical system. 
>>This is not deeply relevant to today's topic , but these days, the Korean medical system is facing a serious problem.
The medical system of korea was almost perfect for quick, precise, and convenient system in thr past. 
>>The medical system of Korea was close to perfection for being quick, precise, and convenient in the past.
But now, the large number of doctors of korea strike their work for their position. 
>>But now, a large number of doctors in Korea are on strike.
the government and the doctor still can't narrow the discrepancy between them.
>>The government and the doctors still haven't narrowed the discrepancy between them.
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