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Why do people leave your country?

작성자: 이*윤
2024-11-29 1488

회원님의 영작문

When I think about it, there seem to be three main reasons.
First, to travel abroad.
This is why most people leave the country.
The percentage of Koreans traveling abroad is increasing, so it will be like a lot of people leaving Korea.
Second, to practice what people have dreamed of or to find and try new things.
This is the case for studying abroad, immigration, and employment abroad.
You can also leave to do all the activities you've dreamed of, or you can leave because you want a new mind and a mental state.
Finally, you may have been hurt by someone or something that made you feel like you couldn't live n your own country or wanted to leave.
However, this is not a common case, nor is it the case for many people.
It's not a common case, but for example, you can get betrayed by someone and get hurt and leave because you hate your country.

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Hello, Yun!~
Thank you for sharing your perspective. Among many reasons, I hope we migrate not because of the negative reasons you mentioned ^^
Chammy
When I think about it, there seem to be three main reasons.
>>Correct
First, to travel abroad. This is why most people leave the country.
OR
>> Most people leave the country primarily to travel.
The percentage of Koreans traveling abroad is increasing, so it will be like a lot of people leaving Korea.
OR
>> The rising number of Koreans traveling overseas creates the impression that people are leaving this country.
Second, to practice what people have dreamed of or to find and try new things. This is the case for studying abroad, immigration, and employment abroad.
OR
>> Secondly, to take into reality one's dream is to explore and discover new things that are common to those who want to study abroad, migrate, and be employed abroad.
You can also leave to do all the activities you've dreamed of, or you can leave because you want a new mind and a mental state.
OR
>> You can also leave to pursue all of your dreams, or you might go to gain a fresh perspective and mental condition.
Finally, you may have been hurt by someone or something that made you feel like you couldn't live n your own country or wanted to leave.
>> Finally, you may have been hurt by someone or something that made you feel like you couldn't live in your own country or wanted to leave.
However, this is not a common case, nor is it the case for many people.
OR
>>On the other hand, we have different reasons and purposes for our actions.
It's not a common case, but for example, you can get betrayed by someone and get hurt and leave because you hate your country.
>> It's not common, but being betrayed and hurt by someone can make you want to leave and hate your country.
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