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Please change difficult words to easy words and correct them so that IELTS Speaking 6.5 or higher scores come out.

Are you a student or do you work?
I¡¯m a college student majoring in dance in Korea. The reason why I decided to major in the subject is that I love beautiful things around us. When I was in a high school, I visited a ballet academy in my town. In there, I was impressed at the beautiful lines of the movements. After that, I decided that it is my subject in my life.

Do you live in an apartment/flat or a house? (=Tell me about the type of accommodation you live in.)
I have lived in an apartment in the downtown for around 10 years. The best part of the apartment is the convenience, which means I don¡¯t have to worry about the maintenance since the maintenance office takes care of all the things in my apartment. Last week, the sink in my house was clogged. At that time, I just called the office and a repairperson came to my house and did everything for the problem.  

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Hi there! You surprised me with your answers! It's my my pleasure to check and simplify them. I hope you could do well on your interview and IELTS exams! Keep youself busy preparing for these  requirements! Good luck!
>>> TEACHER GEMMA
Are you a student or do you work?
>>>I'm a college student majoring in dance in Korea. I chose this field because I love the beauty around us. In high school, I visited a ballet academy and was amazed by the graceful movements. That experience made me realize dance is my passion.

Do you live in an apartment/flat or a house? (=Tell me about the type of accommodation you live in.)
>>>I¡¯ve lived in an apartment downtown for about 10 years. The best part is the convenience—I don¡¯t have to worry about maintenance since the office handles everything. Last week, my sink got clogged, and all I had to do was call the office. A repairperson came right over and took care of the problem.
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