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Do you have a favorite neighbor? Why?

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2024-12-04 1982

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I have a favorite neighbor, who live downstairs from me.
She was a neighbor who was quite close to my family.
There were many similarities with my family memeber.
And above all, she was kind and nice to everyone. She was loved by everyone.
But unfortunately, she moved to another city.

P.S. It was nice meeting you, teacher Gina! I really appreciate you for teaching well. Have a nice day, Good night!

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Hi, Yun! 

Thank you for submitting your essay. 
I'm glad that you were able to meet a nice neighbor. 
It's always nice having such good people around us. 
I hope that in the future, you will find another neighbor who will be as good as her. 

I also appreciated you during our class earlier, and it was really nice meeting you. 
Have a good night and see you! ^^ 

~ Teacher Gina 


I have a favorite neighbor, who live downstairs from me.
>> I have a favorite neighbor who lives downstairs from me.
She was a neighbor who was quite close to my family.
>> CORRECT.
>> Or: She was a neighbor who shared a close relationship with my family. 
There were many similarities with my family memeber.
>> There were many similarities between her and my family member. 
And above all, she was kind and nice to everyone. She was loved by everyone.
>> CORRECT.
>> Or: Above everything, she was kind and warm to everyone, earning everyone¡¯s affection. 
But unfortunately, she moved to another city.
>> CORRECT.
>> Or: Regrettably, she relocated to another city. 


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