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Do you report to the police when finding something lost by others? Why?
What will you do if you find something lost by others?
à If I find someone¡¯s lost item, I try to return it directly or hand it over to the police. It¡¯s the right thing to do to help them.
What kinds of websites are popular in your country?
Are there any changes to the websites you often visit?
à I often visit news websites and social media platforms. Over time, these websites have become more interactive and user-friendly.
What is your favourite website?
What kinds of websites do you often visit?
à My favorite website is YouTube because I can watch videos on various topics. In my country, e-commerce websites and streaming platforms are very popular.
Are there many street markets in your country?
What do people usually buy on the street market?
à Yes, there are many street markets in my country where people buy fresh produce, handmade goods, and snacks. Street markets are popular for their variety and affordability.

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Hi, Young In! Here are the improved versions of your responses to the questions you chose for your homework.
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Do you report to the police when finding something lost by others? Why?
What will you do if you find something lost by others?
If I find someone¡¯s lost item, I try to return it directly or hand it over to the police. It¡¯s the right thing to do to help them.

Do you report to the police when finding something lost by others? Why?
>>Yes, I would report it to the police if I found someone¡¯s lost item. I believe it¡¯s important to return lost belongings, and the police can help ensure it gets back to the rightful owner. It¡¯s just the right thing to do, and it¡¯s a way of showing consideration for others.

What will you do if you find something lost by others?
>>If I find something that someone has lost, I would make an effort to return it to them directly or take it to the police. I believe it¡¯s the right thing to do, and it helps ensure the person gets their belongings back.

What kinds of websites are popular in your country?
 In my country, e-commerce websites and streaming platforms are very popular.
>>In my country, e-commerce websites and streaming platforms are very well-known. People often use e-commerce sites for shopping online, while streaming platforms are widely used for watching movies, TV shows, and listening to music. Both types of websites have become essential in everyday life.

Are there any changes to the websites you often visit?

I often visit news websites and social media platforms. Over time, these websites have become more interactive and user-friendly.
>>Definitely Yes! There have been some changes. I often browse news websites and social media platforms, and over time, these sites have become much more interactive and user-friendly. They now offer features like live updates, personalized content, and more engaging ways to interact with others.

What is your favourite website?
What kinds of websites do you often visit?
My favorite website is YouTube because I can watch videos on various topics. In my country, e-commerce websites and streaming platforms are very popular.

What is your favourite website?
My favorite website is YouTube because I can watch videos on various topics.
>>My preferred website is YouTube because it offers a wide range of videos on various topics. Whether I'm looking for entertainment, educational content, or tutorials, YouTube has something for every interest I have. It's a great platform for me to learn and stay updated on trends.

What kinds of websites do you often visit?
I often visit news websites and social media platforms. 
>> I frequently browse news websites and social media platforms. These websites keep me informed about current events and allow me to stay connected with friends and the latest trends.
Are there many street markets in your country?
What do people usually buy on the street market?
Yes, there are many street markets in my country where people buy fresh produce, handmade goods, and snacks. Street markets are popular for their variety and affordability.

Are there many street markets in your country?
>> Absolutely yes! There are numerous street markets in my country where people can buy fresh produce, handmade goods, and snacks. These markets are popular due to their wide selection and affordable prices.

What do people usually buy on the street market?
>> Street markets in my country are popular for their wide selection and affordable prices, offering a variety of items for people to purchase. Typically, people buy fresh produce, handmade goods, and snacks.
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