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I think tourism attraction is the greatest product in each country .
People don't get tired of nature although time goes by.
So they will visit again.
If government developes the road and related industry near the attraction.
More and more people can visit there .

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Hi Ms. Sunny!
Thank you for this and I got your point. As tourism became a "money magnet" in many countries, the government should not only focus on this because we already experienced that during the COVID-19 pandemic where the main industry that was greatly affected was the tourism industry.
Have a great Monday!
Aki~


I think tourism attraction is the greatest product in each country.
>>> CORRECT!

People don't get tired of nature although time goes by.
>>>  People don't get tired of nature as time goes by.

So they will visit again.
>>> CORRECT!

If government developes the road and related industry near the attraction.
>>> If the government develops the road and related industry near the attraction.

More and more people can visit there.
>>> CORRECT!
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