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Q : Have you ever experienced a situation that felt negative at first but later turned out to be a blessing in disguise? What happened, and how did things improve? Describe your experience in detail.

A : Yes, i have. When i graduated a university, my family moved temporarily to other city.
At first, i did not want to move. However, i moved with my family because i did not have a job at that time.
But, i was employed from the previous company.
Since i am still working in Seoul, maybe it is a blessing in disguise.
Although i did not want to move, i am still working at here.

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Hello Eddy!

You're doing a great job expressing your thoughts! I like how you connected your experience to the idea of a blessing in disguise. Your story is clear, and it shows personal growth and adaptability, which makes it really interesting to read.

To make your answer even stronger, you could add more details about how you felt during the transition and what specific opportunities came from your move. For example, did the move help you discover something new about yourself? Or did it give you unexpected advantages in your career?

You're making great progress, and I can see your confidence growing in your writing. Keep up the great work!

~Teacher Cathy

 

Yes, i have. When i graduated a university, my family moved temporarily to other city.

>>Yes, I have. When I graduated from university, my family temporarily moved to another city.

At first, i did not want to move.

>>CORRECT

OR>>Initially, I was reluctant to move.

However, i moved with my family because i did not have a job at that time.

>>CORRECT

OR>>However, I relocated with my family since I was unemployed at that time.

But, i was employed from the previous company.

>>But I was employed by my previous company.

Since i am still working in Seoul, maybe it is a blessing in disguise.

>>CORRECT

OR>>Since I am still working in Seoul, perhaps it turned out to be a blessing in disguise.

Although i did not want to move, i am still working at here.

>>Although I did not want to move, I am still working here.

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