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Describe your friends. (general or specific - choose one friend you want to describe)

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I have various kinds of friends such as hometown friends, college friends, military friends and company friends.
Among them, I 'd like to talk about college friends.
I'm from the countryside and first went to Seoul in 1986 when I entered college. I majored in business administration in college and there were about 30 of my classmates. Some of them were from Seoul and most of them were from all over Korea.
We competed for grades while we were in college, and after graduation, we talked mostly about each other's jobs and marriage. And when we were in our 40s, we talked about each other's promotions and children. And now that we are in our late 50s, we talk about each other's children's marriages and our lives after retirement.
We currently work and live in various places in Korea, including Seoul. so we meet at Seoul on the last Friday of every three months and have dinner and talk and spend time together.
I hope we all live long and happy, and that our friendship lasts forever.

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Hi, Soon Ho^^
Thank you for sharing.
It seems like you have many friends.
It's good that you were able to maintain the relationship that you have with them.
_T. SHAY^^
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I have various kinds of friends such as hometown friends, college friends, military friends and company friends.
>>Correct
OR: I have many circle of friends such as hometown, college, military and even company friends.

Among them, I 'd like to talk about college friends.
>>Correct
OR: I'd like to specifically talk about the friends I met in college.

I'm from the countryside and first went to Seoul in 1986 when I entered college. 
>>Correct
OR: I was born and raised in the countryside, and I first went to Seoul when I entered college in 1986.
I majored in business administration in college and there were about 30 of my classmates. 
>>I majored in business administration in college, and there were about 30 classmates. 
OR: I majored in business administration and I had around 30 classmates.
Some of them were from Seoul and most of them were from all over Korea.
>>Correct
OR: Some of them were from Seoul and most of them were from different parts of Korea.

We competed for grades while we were in college, and after graduation, we talked mostly about each other's jobs and marriage. 
>>Correct
OR: We all studied hard when we were in college, and after graduation, we talked about our jobs and marriage.

And when we were in our 40s, we talked about each other's promotions and children.
>>Correct
OR: And when we were in our 40s, our topics changed into promotions and having children.

And now that we are in our late 50s, we talk about each other's children's marriages and our lives after retirement.
>>Correct
OR: And now that we are in our late 50s, we talk about our children's marriage and our retirement plans.

We currently work and live in various places in Korea, including Seoul. 
>>Correct
OR: We currently work and live in different places in Korea. 
so we meet at Seoul on the last Friday of every three months and have dinner and talk and spend time together.
>>So, we meet in Seoul on the last Friday of every quarter to have dinner, talk and spend time together.
I hope we all live long and happy, and that our friendship lasts forever.
>>Correct
OR: I hope we all live a long and happy life and may our friendship last forever.


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