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HOMEWORK: Is volunteering worth the time it takes?

I think volunteering is worth it. I don't think it's worth it when it comes to money, but I think it's enough in that there are many things that can be done to develop different ideas.
Many things are important in our lives, and money is important, but that is not all.
Money doesn't determine everything. We should be able to find a value that is more important than money. And I think it's volunteering that can help us find it.

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Hello, Alex!
Thank you for sharing your insights about the given question. ^^
Chammy
I think volunteering is worth it. 
OR
>> I believe it's worthwhile to volunteer. 
I don't think it's worth it when it comes to money, but I think it's enough in that there are many things that can be done to develop different ideas.
OR
>> Financially speaking, I don't think it's worth it, but I do think it's sufficient because there are several ways to come up with new ideas.
Many things are important in our lives, and money is important, but that is not all.
OR
>> Money is vital, but it's not the only thing that matters in our lives.
Money doesn't determine everything.
OR
>> Money cannot be the sole determining factor.
We should be able to find a value that is more important than money.
OR
>> There must be a value that surpasses monetary worth.
 And I think it's volunteering that can help us find it.
OR
>> And I believe that we can find it through volunteering.
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