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First, I really want to eat a lot of Mangosteens in affordable price. I took vinyl gloves because of mangosteens, but I couldn't eat them. I'll check the season of mangosteen again before trip. And I want to see the sunset of Boracay on the boat. Many people take a photo during sunset sailing. I'll book a nice resort again, because I was really satisfied with a resort's pool. I'll check the peak time of club and visit the club again for a short time. I just enjoy the mood of crowded club.

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Hi, Megan^^
Thank you for sharing.
Well, since you've been to Boracay already, I'm pretty sure you know how to plan better on your next visit.
_T. SHAY^^

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First, I really want to eat a lot of Mangosteens in affordable price. 
>>First, I really want to eat a lot of mangosteens at an affordable price. 
I took vinyl gloves because of mangosteens, but I couldn't eat them.
>>
I brought vinyl gloves because of the mangosteens, but I couldn't eat them.
OR: I brought vinyl gloves for the mangosteens, but I didn't get to eat them.
I'll check the season of mangosteen again before trip.
>>
I'll check the season of mangosteen again before my next trip.
And I want to see the sunset of Boracay on the boat.
>>
And I want to see the sunset in Boracay from a boat.
OR: I want to watch the sunset over Boracay while on a boat.
Many people take a photo during sunset sailing.
>>Correct
OR: Many people take photos while sailing at sunset.

I'll book a nice resort again, because I was really satisfied with a resort's pool.
>>
I'll book a nice resort again, because I was really satisfied with the resort's pool.
I'll check the peak time of club and visit the club again for a short time.
>>
I'll check the club's peak hours and visit again, even if it's only for a little while. 
I just enjoy the mood of crowded club.
>>Correct
OR: I just enjoy the atmosphere of a crowded club.


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