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Happy moments is right now

김희원/2025-08-05

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I always felt the happinest age where It is not . Because we can have funny time depending on age. when I was teenager, i liked to meet school friends , it was one of happy things Now I'm adult that can more legal activities finally , Both teenager and adult have each other happy

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Good day to you Un! You’re sharing a personal reflection about happiness at different ages, which is a great topic. You mention specific examples like meeting school friends, which makes it relatable. Here’s some revisions to improve your essay:

TEACHER GEMMA

I always felt the happinest age where It is not . Because we can have funny time depending on age. when I was teenager, i liked to meet school friends , it was one of happy things.

REVISED: I always thought there was one happiest age, but actually, happiness comes at different times in life. We can have fun depending on our age. When I was a teenager, I enjoyed meeting my school friends; that was one of the happiest things for me.

Now I'm adult that can more legal activities finally , Both teenager and adult have each other happy

REVISED: Now that I’m an adult and can do more legal activities, I find happiness in new ways. Both being a teenager and an adult have their own unique joys.