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권경희/2025-02-04

회원님의 올려주신 영작문
Why do they want to work even before 15? Strictly speaking, what they want is not to work, but to earn money. I think there may be differences in reasons between Korean and Filipino teenagers working before 15. At least, it's very seldom for the family's livelihood in Korea. It is a serous problem.
강사님의 첨삭교정 내용
Ms. Lily!
I do appreciate that you share your thoughts here on our board because there are times when our class is not enough for discussion.
In the past, children as early as 9 years old are already roaming the market to sell plastic shopping bags. They do that to have pocket money and be able to buy snacks or even lunch in school. However, the government implemented a law banning these kids from working. 
Have a great day!
Aki~ 

Why do they want to work even before 15?
>>> CORRECT!

Strictly speaking, what they want is not to work, but to earn money.
>>> CORRECT!

I think there may be differences in reasons between Korean and Filipino teenagers working before 15.
>>> CORRECT!

At least, it's very seldom for the family's livelihood in Korea. It is a serous problem.
>>> At least, it's very seldom for the family's livelihood in Korea. It is a serious problem.
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