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What activity do you miss doing with your daughters these days ?
박순호/2025-02-05
회원님의 올려주신 영작문
I would like to do activity with my daughters as much as possible.
I really love them, so I want to spend much time and have good memories with them. even if I have much time because I am retiring soon, they are in the early days of their workplaces and one of them has already a boyfriend, so it is very hard for them make time to do activies with me, especially a long trip.
so l already suggested several times them to take a long trip like we went to the United States 17 years ago.
I think that taking a long trip with them seems like to be a little bit impossible in the near future but hopefully it will come true someday when they can take their annual leaves freely.
강사님의 첨삭교정 내용
Hi, Sun Ho^^
Thank you for making time to do your homework.
I'll see you in class tomorrow.
_T. SHAY^^
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I would like to do activity with my daughters as much as possible.
>>I would like to do activities with my daughters as much as possible.
I really love them, so I want to spend much time and have good memories with them.
>>I really love them, so I want to spend much time and have good memories with them.
even if I have much time because I am retiring soon, they are in the early days of their workplaces and one of them has already a boyfriend, so it is very hard for them make time to do activies with me, especially a long trip.
>>Even though I have plenty of time since I am retiring soon, they are busy with work, and one of them already has a boyfriend. So, it is very hard for them to make time for activities with me, especially for a long trip.
so l already suggested several times them to take a long trip like we went to the United States 17 years ago.
>>I already suggested several times to take a long trip like when we went to the United States 17 years ago.
I think that taking a long trip with them seems like to be a little bit impossible in the near future but hopefully it will come true someday when they can take their annual leaves freely.
>>I think taking a long trip with them seems a bit impossible in the near future, but hopefully, it will come true someday when they take their annual leave.
Thank you for making time to do your homework.
I'll see you in class tomorrow.
_T. SHAY^^
***
I would like to do activity with my daughters as much as possible.
>>I would like to do activities with my daughters as much as possible.
I really love them, so I want to spend much time and have good memories with them.
>>I really love them, so I want to spend much time and have good memories with them.
even if I have much time because I am retiring soon, they are in the early days of their workplaces and one of them has already a boyfriend, so it is very hard for them make time to do activies with me, especially a long trip.
>>Even though I have plenty of time since I am retiring soon, they are busy with work, and one of them already has a boyfriend. So, it is very hard for them to make time for activities with me, especially for a long trip.
so l already suggested several times them to take a long trip like we went to the United States 17 years ago.
>>I already suggested several times to take a long trip like when we went to the United States 17 years ago.
I think that taking a long trip with them seems like to be a little bit impossible in the near future but hopefully it will come true someday when they can take their annual leaves freely.
>>I think taking a long trip with them seems a bit impossible in the near future, but hopefully, it will come true someday when they take their annual leave.
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