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My childhood memories in Suwon

홍하은/2025-02-06

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There is one more famous thing in Suwon called Hwasung Hanggung. It is a castle which built in Chosen dynasty, King JeaongJo built it to memory his dead father with wonderful science technology. Because there are a lot of beautiful and unique cafe, me and my friend often spend the time in that place. After eating, we walk along the castle route. The night view of Hwasung is breathtaking!

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Hi Hannah,

It is such a beautiful picture! Thanks for sharing your childhood memories. I would love to visit this place someday! ^^

-Teacher Ash

There is one more famous thing in Suwon called Hwasung Hanggung.

>> Another popular place in Suwon is called Hwasong Hanggang.

It is a castle which built in Chosen dynasty,

>> It is a castle which was built in the Joseon dynasty.

King JeaongJo built it to memory his dead father with wonderful science technology.

>> King Jeonju built it in memory of his dead father with wonderful science technology.

Because there are a lot of beautiful and unique cafe, me and my friend often spend the time in that place.

>> Because there are a lot of beautiful and unique cafes, me and my friend would often spend time in that place.

After eating, we walk along the castle route.

>> CORRECT

The night view of Hwasung is breathtaking!

>> CORRECT